Subject: Re: CVS commit: htdocs/guide/en
To: Daniel Carosone <dan@geek.com.au>
From: Hubert Feyrer <hubert@feyrer.de>
List: www-changes
Date: 11/16/2004 01:25:59
On Mon, 15 Nov 2004, Daniel Carosone wrote:
> This one change below seems to have broken the english..

Um, sort of true, which seems was not hard for that long a sentence.
How about this:

       <para>
         Now it's time to create our <devicename>cgd</devicename>, for which
         we'll need a passphrase.  This passphrase needs to be entered
         every time the <devicename>cgd</devicename> is opened, which is
         usually at each reboot. The encryption key is derived from this
         passphrase and the salt that the encryption key used.
         Make sure you choose something you won't forget, and others won't
         guess.
       </para>

What do you think?


  - Hubert

>
> ***************
> *** 396,403 ****
>          Now it's time to create our <devicename>cgd</devicename>, for which
>          we'll need a passphrase.  This passphrase needs to be entered
>          every time the <devicename>cgd</devicename> is opened, usually at
> !         each reboot, and it is from this passphrase and the salt that
> !         the encryption key used is derived.  Make sure you choose
>          something you won't forget, and others won't guess.
>        </para>
>
> --- 431,439 ----
>          Now it's time to create our <devicename>cgd</devicename>, for which
>          we'll need a passphrase.  This passphrase needs to be entered
>          every time the <devicename>cgd</devicename> is opened, usually at
> !         each reboot, and it is derived from this passphrase and the
> !         salt that
> !         the encryption key used.  Make sure you choose
>          something you won't forget, and others won't guess.
>        </para>
>
>
> perhaps, instead, "... reboot. The encryption key used by cgd is
> derived from this passphrase and the salt."
>
> (I still need to add descriptions for some of the other keygen
> methods, and for the params file in general, both of which will help
> clarify this).
>
> --
> Dan.
>

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