Subject: Re: More Guide patches
To: NetBSD Docs <netbsd-docs@NetBSD.org>
From: Ceri Davies <ceri@submonkey.net>
List: netbsd-docs
Date: 12/12/2004 18:31:12
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On Sun, Dec 12, 2004 at 04:22:16PM +0000, Ceri Davies wrote:
> Some spelling corrections, some grammar, and some corrections to what
> I believe are Deutsch-isms.

Updated patch to chap-boot.xml, as the one provided earlier now has
conflicts.

Ceri
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Only two things are infinite, the universe and human stupidity, and I'm
not sure about the former.			  -- Einstein (attrib.)

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Index: chap-boot.xml
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RCS file: /a/NetBSD/ncvs/htdocs/guide/en/chap-boot.xml,v
retrieving revision 1.17
diff -u -r1.17 chap-boot.xml
--- chap-boot.xml	11 Dec 2004 01:10:56 -0000	1.17
+++ chap-boot.xml	12 Dec 2004 18:29:50 -0000
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@
     <para>For the first login you will use the <username>root</username>
       superuser, which is the only user defined at the end of the
       installation.
-      At the password prompt write the password for root that you
+      At the password prompt type the password for root that you
       have defined during the installation.
       If you haven't defined a password, just press Enter.</para>
=20
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@
   <sect1 id=3D"chap-boot-keyboard-layout">
     <title>Changing the keyboard layout</title>
=20
-    <para>The keyboard has still the US layout; if you have a different ke=
yboard
+    <para>The keyboard still has the US layout; if you have a different ke=
yboard
       it's better to change its layout now, before
       starting to configure the system.
       For example, to use the italian keyboard, give the following command=
:</para>
@@ -105,14 +105,14 @@
       <quote><replaceable>name</replaceable></quote>
       command and <command>man -k <replaceable>name</replaceable></command=
> shows a list of man pages
       dealing with <quote><replaceable>name</replaceable></quote> (you can=
 also use the
-      <command>apropos</command> command.)</para>
+      <command>apropos</command> command).</para>
=20
     <para>To learn the basics of the <command>man</command> command, type:=
</para>
=20
     <screen>&rprompt; <userinput>man man</userinput></screen>
=20
-    <para>The manual is divided in nine sections, containing not only basic
-      informations on commands but also the descriptions of some &os;
+    <para>The manual is divided into nine sections, containing not only ba=
sic
+      information on commands but also the descriptions of some &os;
       features and structures.
       For example, take a look at the &man.hier.7; man page, which describ=
es in
       detail the layout of the filesystem used by &os;.</para>
@@ -204,7 +204,7 @@
 New password:
 Retype new password:</screen>
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-    <para>Password are not displayed on the screen while you type.
+    <para>Passwords are not displayed on the screen while you type.
       Later we will see how to add other accounts on the system.</para>
   </sect1>
=20
@@ -217,7 +217,7 @@
       chosen during system installation time, and it usually is
       <command>csh</command>; if this
       doesn't mean anything to you, you should begin studying csh with
-      (&man.csh.1;): it's a good interactive shell
+      &man.csh.1;: it's a good interactive shell
       although it lacks history editing (have a look at
       <emphasis>tcsh</emphasis>, bash or even the &os;
       <filename>/bin/sh</filename> for this).
@@ -239,12 +239,12 @@
     </itemizedlist>
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     <para>The new shell will come into effect the next time you login.
-      In the mean time, you can issue the following command if you use
+      In the meantime, you can issue the following command if you use
       <command>csh</command>:</para>
=20
     <screen>&rprompt; <userinput>set filec</userinput></screen>
=20
-    <para>that enables filename completion on the command line (with the E=
SC
+    <para>which enables filename completion on the command line (with the =
ESC
       key; use Ctrl+D for a list of possible completions.)</para>
=20
     <para>You can also install other shells on the system, if you want to:
@@ -316,7 +316,7 @@
       the one in <filename>/etc/defaults/rc.conf</filename> (which
       should stay unchanged).</para>
=20
-    <para>Understanding the <filename>/etc/rc.con</filename> file is
+    <para>Understanding the <filename>/etc/rc.conf</filename> file is
       very important.  The &man.rc.conf.5; manual page contains a
       detailed description of all the options.</para>
=20
@@ -343,16 +343,16 @@
       </listitem>
=20
       <listitem>
-        <para>Define an <emphasis>hostname</emphasis> for your machine (use
+        <para>Define a <emphasis>hostname</emphasis> for your machine (use
           a fully qualified hostname, i.e. one including domain).
           If you have a standalone machine you can use any name (for
-          example, <hostid>woody.toys.net</hostid>.)
+          example, <hostid>woody.toys.net</hostid>).
           If your machine is connected to a network, you should supply
           the correct network name.</para>
=20
 	<note>
 	  <para>Make sure that the hostname is resolvable, either using
-	    DNS or <filename>/etc/hosts</filename>, some programs
+	    DNS or <filename>/etc/hosts</filename>; some programs
 	    do not work with an unresolvable hostname.</para>
 	</note>
       </listitem>
@@ -387,7 +387,7 @@
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     <para>
       Suppose we want to enable soft-dependencies for all filesystems,
-      except for the <filename>/</filename> partition, we would change
+      except for the <filename>/</filename> partition. We would change
       it to (changes are emphasized):
     </para>
=20
@@ -431,7 +431,7 @@
   <sect1 id=3D"chap-boot-rebooting">
     <title>Rebooting the system</title>
=20
-    <para>In this first session you have</para>
+    <para>In this first session you have:</para>
=20
     <itemizedlist>
       <listitem>

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